According to the Figure 1... ..was the pre-handover boom in ..that Pre handover boomed tense: This might behave been the result ..Central arewere evaluated in a survey...(survey has already been completed) ..staff isare satisfied.. Staff have.... ..One possible cause of this is ..and software there areuse old versions.. ..that it is inefficient in work process... (not very clear) Some of your reasons and implications could be more convincing. Describing line graphs and discussing data
Hong Kong According to Figure 1, the profits of Mojo in Hong Kong rose sharply and reached a peak in 1997 when nearly HK$60 million were made. The possible reason was the pre-handover boomed in Hong Kong. However, this was followed by a sudden decline and in 1999 profits fell to their lowest point of just HK$20 million. This might have been the result of post handover depression. Because of growth of China market, profits then grew steadily towards 2001.
Singapore In contrast, in the early 1990s, due to the adoption of Singaporean taxation policy, profits in Singapore climbed gradually to 1995 before they stabilized at about HK$50 million until 1996. Unfortunately, Singapore faced keen competition from Malaysia since the mid 1990s, so profits then fell sharply in 1998 before they leveled off at about HK$30 million until 1999. Profits then dropped sharply towards 2001.
Describing table and discussing data
Seven aspects of working conditions at the head office in Central were evaluated in a survey. As the findings in Table 4, it implicates that three out of seven aspects should be concerned.
Office Furniture Three-quarters of senior level staff are contented with office furniture while just under a half of junior level staff are satisfied. It is clear that old-fashioned and uncomfortable furniture are the causes of the low level of satisfaction. The implication is that the performance of junior staff will be influenced.
Equipment Senior level staff (71%) have much higher satisfaction with equipment than junior staff(26%). One possible cause of this is that the computers and software there use old version and run slowly. It indicates that it is inefficient in work process and information sharing.
Pantry The satisfaction rate of both senior and junior level staff are the same with more than half disgruntled. It appears that dirty kitchen, and insufficient microwaves will lower the commitment of staff to organization. It may result in lower job performance and higher turnover rate.
According to the Figure 1...
..was the pre-handover boom in ..that Pre handover boomed
tense: This might be have been the result
..Central are were evaluated in a survey...(survey has already been completed)
..staff is are satisfied..
Staff have....
..One possible cause of this is
..and software there are use old versions..
..that it is inefficient in work process... (not very clear)
Some of your reasons and implications could be more convincing.
Describing line graphs and discussing data
Hong Kong
According to Figure 1, the profits of Mojo in Hong Kong rose sharply and reached a peak in 1997 when nearly HK$60 million were made. The possible reason was the pre-handover boomed in Hong Kong. However, this was followed by a sudden decline and in 1999 profits fell to their lowest point of just HK$20 million. This might have been the result of post handover depression. Because of growth of China market, profits then grew steadily towards 2001.
Singapore
In contrast, in the early 1990s, due to the adoption of Singaporean taxation policy, profits in Singapore climbed gradually to 1995 before they stabilized at about HK$50 million until 1996. Unfortunately, Singapore faced keen competition from Malaysia since the mid 1990s, so profits then fell sharply in 1998 before they leveled off at about HK$30 million until 1999. Profits then dropped sharply towards 2001.
Describing table and discussing data
Seven aspects of working conditions at the head office in Central were evaluated in a survey. As the findings in Table 4, it implicates that three out of seven aspects should be concerned.
Office Furniture
Three-quarters of senior level staff are contented with office furniture while just under a half of junior level staff are satisfied. It is clear that old-fashioned and uncomfortable furniture are the causes of the low level of satisfaction. The implication is that the performance of junior staff will be influenced.
Equipment
Senior level staff (71%) have much higher satisfaction with equipment than junior staff(26%). One possible cause of this is that the computers and software there use old version and run slowly. It indicates that it is inefficient in work process and information sharing.
Pantry
The satisfaction rate of both senior and junior level staff are the same with more than half disgruntled. It appears that dirty kitchen, and insufficient microwaves will lower the commitment of staff to organization. It may result in lower job performance and higher turnover rate.